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when they finally returned
the house had split along the
outer corners
water had burrowed
under the floorboards
knocking them up and into criss-cross patterns
under their feet

floated furniture had
punctured the walls and
he thought the whole abode had ran itself apart
as if to flee
from a crime
a muddy line
sat neatly across the windows bottom half
so they could both see where the flood had peaked
that night

she couldn’t go to the child’s room
instead she sat upon an old potato box in the place
they use to call the living room
– already numb from
the doxepin
she needed that morning
just to make it back

he walked outside himself
in his own haze
and was already dizzy and
weeping in stifled jolts
as he reached the place
at the hallway's end

what was left of the child’s door
sat against the far wall
the broken cot was overturned
in pieces against it

his knees buckled
like tiny twigs under an
enormous weight
and he found himself strewn
amongst the broken floorboards
at the doorway
trying hard to fight for breath
but all the while not wanting to

as if by some unseen correspondence
she began to wail in loud echoes
in the living room
and that terrible sound went on and that terrible
sound would not stop

and between them both
a different kind of storm had flooded them
and the place in their hearts that was once bright and dry
and young
took to a slow mould and to a rot
and their hearts were that way
and their hearts
would be that way
for ever more.
The valley flooded quickly and without warning. The lives of many were thrown apart like they didn't matter. The world is an angry mystery to me.
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The Flood by brassteeth ( Suggested by alapip and Featured by BeccaJS )
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Kay-March Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2017
Gllad that you have received a DD with this piece. It's a beautiful and poetic story telling.
May you receive many more.
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2017
Thank you.
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Kay-March Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2017
You're most welcome!
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beeswingblue Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2017   Writer
Congrats on the DD! It's well deserved. :heart:
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2017
Thanks!
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Keyrina Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2017
very heartbreaking and sad, nicely written as well, congratz :)
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2017
Thanks
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LostGryphin Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2017  Hobbyist Photographer
Congrats on the DD - I think many people can relate to this kind of loss whether it is loss due to a flood, a fire, an earthquake, etc.  
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2017
Thanks. I agree.
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akrasiel Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2017  Professional Writer
This speaks to me in multiple ways – my parents just sold their house/my home of 15 years, and my home province is currently suffering wildfires that have evacuated tens of thousands of people. As an expat to another country, I'm a little scared there'll be nothing to return to. Beautiful, moving writing. :heart:
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2017
Thank you. I wish your home a long and safe future.
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Sleyf Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wonderfully written and we'll deserving of a DD for both the imagery and the emotion conveyed in this piece
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2017
Thanks for the feedback.
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Sleyf Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome!
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EricVonSchweetz Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2017  Student Digital Artist
Congratulations on DD!
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2017
Thank you
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SouthSydney Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2017
Heartbreaking.
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2017
Yes.
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alapip Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
Christopher, this is beyond real,
and terribly tragic. So tragic it
feels strange to praise it as it
deserves to be praised.  :hmm: pip
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Edited Jul 8, 2017
Too real Pip. The world looks chaotic. Like many, I just try and find a schematic that could show a plan to the chaos. Thanks for your comment.
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alapip Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, one can try to somehow explain, even justify
as part of a plan. I think my way is better: In our
random universe, everyone is equally exposed to
tragedy, but the random chance of it means it is
distributed indiscriminately. Be grateful for all the
good that happens in your life. Equally, for the bad,
don't take it personal, because "shit happens".
:shrug: pip 
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2017
Yes well said. I think I will just keep working on appreciating things that I have!
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