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Watercolours
of finished fisherman,
eyes bright
with brushstrokes
of aqua-blue,
given goldfish pupils,
and draining, seeping garments,
backed by bursts,
salt-watered waves.

No.

I am for the fences,
the stone walled ledges.
I am here, like the King,
for the gold gilt borders,
those intricate
woven edges.

Peripheral parallel,
herding back in silence,
landscapes of thunder,
stampedes of wild Ponies,
still life sacks
of spilling cornflour,
spotted hay, a sunny bay,
and perfect, oiled,
summer days.

Damning all dreams,
surrounding the scenes,
to placate and demarcate,
with a single,
straight-faced
expression,

an ocean of hues,
mere mountains of oil,
piles of precious pigments,
magnifying, surrounding, raising,
a Mephistopheles,
of perfect angles.

Sitting at the side
of painted dreams,
balls and dabs, rubs
and strokes,
spots and smears,
it appears,
I fear,
that
like all things
I am also framed,
by a greater mystery.
or

"When the painting frame looked out"

Simply Poetry

Word association

Watercolours, cornflour and Ponies
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katarthis Featured By Owner May 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
An interesting way of telling it. I wasn't sure I understood anything of it until I hit the end. Then things made sense, and I decided I like this.

k
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brassteeth Featured By Owner May 29, 2011
Thank you! I appreciate that!
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wildhype Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2010
bravo
wet, wild, and sloppy
i like poems to be this way
i like other things to be this way also
:heart:
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2010
Thankyou.
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Love your wordcraft BT :) though truthfully, 'association' and othr 'abstract' pieces leave my poor ADD brain in shambles. :D
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2010
Hi Pal,
Ha, Ha...Pretty simple, Painting Frame looks in sees control...Painting Frame looks out with wonder....Said Frame then struck by what he/she may be framed by..

But thanks so much for reading...
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:) Thanks... I needed that. :love:
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VertigoArt Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2010  Professional Writer
The imagery you used here was accomplished elegantly.

"Peripheral parallel,
herding back in silence,
"

That was my favorite bit. It assists the reader in painting a picture in their mind.

Thank you for sharing.
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2010
Thankya..Thankya
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ihaveastory Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
Very well constructed and wonderful diction and imagery. The first stanza could stand on it's own, and the rest could stand without the first stanza, I find it intriguing that you keep them together. Good stuff.
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2009
:thanks:
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Ypres Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2009
Wow, images. I particularly like the way you snuck in rhymes here and there, among the flood of imagery. One of the things I struggle with is an excess of abstract language, so I'm fascinated to see how you concrete-ifed something so unusual.
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2009
Hi, you mean, you struggle with abstract, or you struggle with how much abstract language is in this poem?
I'll take it as a compliment, I always love your feedback!
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Ypres Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2009
I meant using abstract, rather than concrete, language to describe and evoke the subject in my own work. Yours was the counter-example to my own difficulties.
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2009
:thanks:
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:) I really like this, because of the strong imagery and not only that, it can be conceived as a picture yet you talk about what the picture is made out of "the mountains of oil" :P this is definitely one of my favorites of your works
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2009
thanks, I like that, I like that alot, thats true...

Cheers!
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2009   Writer
the no is my favorite bit
it has character

the whole piece is great though
and I love the close
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2009
Thanks.
I did not want to over imbue the Frame with a sense of personality outside of it's denial characteristic. It really is a function of creating boundaries. Frames are rather blunt that way.

Thanks for the feedback, yours is always welcome.

:wave:
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UltimateOutlaw Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2009
This was, like, a sensory attack... and yes, quite intriguing. I dig it :heart:
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2009
Hey,
Love your nice feedback.
Thanks and yeh, amazing what a trip to the "American Impressionists" can do!
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2009   Writer
Quite bold, and very intriguing.
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2009
Thankyou, thankyou!
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