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Watercolours
of finished fisherman,
eyes bright
with brushstrokes
of aqua-blue,
given goldfish pupils,
and draining, seeping garments,
backed by bursts,
salt-watered waves.

No.

I am for the fences,
the stone walled ledges.
I am here, like the King,
for the gold gilt borders,
those intricate
woven edges.

Peripheral parallel,
herding back in silence,
landscapes of thunder,
stampedes of wild Ponies,
still life sacks
of spilling cornflour,
spotted hay, a sunny bay,
and perfect, oiled,
summer days.

Damning all dreams,
surrounding the scenes,
to placate and demarcate,
with a single,
straight-faced
expression,

an ocean of hues,
mere mountains of oil,
piles of precious pigments,
magnifying, surrounding, raising,
a Mephistopheles,
of perfect angles.

Sitting at the side
of painted dreams,
balls and dabs, rubs
and strokes,
spots and smears,
it appears,
I fear,
that
like all things
I am also framed,
by a greater mystery.
or

"When the painting frame looked out"

Simply Poetry

Word association

Watercolours, cornflour and Ponies
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katarthis May 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
An interesting way of telling it. I wasn't sure I understood anything of it until I hit the end. Then things made sense, and I decided I like this.

k
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:iconbrassteeth:
Thank you! I appreciate that!
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:iconwildhype:
bravo
wet, wild, and sloppy
i like poems to be this way
i like other things to be this way also
:heart:
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rlkirkland Oct 20, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Love your wordcraft BT :) though truthfully, 'association' and othr 'abstract' pieces leave my poor ADD brain in shambles. :D
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:iconbrassteeth:
Hi Pal,
Ha, Ha...Pretty simple, Painting Frame looks in sees control...Painting Frame looks out with wonder....Said Frame then struck by what he/she may be framed by..

But thanks so much for reading...
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rlkirkland Oct 20, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:) Thanks... I needed that. :love:
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VertigoArt Oct 20, 2010  Professional Writer
The imagery you used here was accomplished elegantly.

"Peripheral parallel,
herding back in silence,
"

That was my favorite bit. It assists the reader in painting a picture in their mind.

Thank you for sharing.
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:iconbrassteeth:
Thankya..Thankya
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ihaveastory Jul 6, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
Very well constructed and wonderful diction and imagery. The first stanza could stand on it's own, and the rest could stand without the first stanza, I find it intriguing that you keep them together. Good stuff.
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