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We sat sipping grappa as the storm clouds rolled in from the ridges
like the smoke from some great unseen inferno,
the wood walls and shingles of the house complained to us
in low groans,
of the wind coming up hard, through the valley,

and there was flickering light from a candle,
and she told me how light from a prism dissects into different colours that correspond
in some way to our bodies and that all of life was a rhythm

and I believed that part,

and I believed there were stars beyond the sight of man on any grey day
and that they might hold some greater secret than prisms or rhythms
or any question a farmers son could ever mutter,
   
and the wind slowed to a stillness
and the rain moved in and our voices gave way
to what my Father would call The Lords Music,
the pitter-patter of water
on the dry and flaking earth.
rain
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:iconjade-pandora:
jade-pandora Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012
Your wonderful words are featured here: [link]
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012
:heart: :heart:
Thanks so much for your support!!!
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:iconjade-pandora:
jade-pandora Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012
:iconheartlaplz: It's a pleasure, Christopher!
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner May 16, 2012   General Artist
I'm at a loss for words:heart:
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner May 16, 2012
and thanks for the Favourites!!!
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner May 16, 2012   General Artist
Definitely! :happybounce:
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MartinSilvertant Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2012  Professional General Artist
Beautiful poem. To me there seems to be an atmosphere of melancholy though. It makes me think of the words spoken in this eerie track: Blood Box — Mother of Dust (spoken word starting at 4:19 minutes). Those words are just as profound yet empty as your poem, if you know what I mean. Perhaps I'm just completely misinterpreting the meaning of your words.
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i-am-a-bridgewalker Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
this breathes in the synapse between science and mysticism. incredibly poignant vignette of two people reaching into the beyond, reaching toward something more.
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2011
Yes that's exactly right, glad you got that out of it. Thank you for your feedback. I appreciate it.
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:iconi-am-a-bridgewalker:
i-am-a-bridgewalker Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
your language is so slender that it begs time and attention. makes your readers work for it, just enough.
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2011
Yes that's exactly right, glad you got that out of it. Thank you for your feedback. I appreciate it.
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:iconpiscesandthediamonds:
Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
this is mind blowing...the mysterious tone and curiousity is enough to melt me :heart: you're so talented.
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2011
:heart:
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2011   Writer
fantastic when read aloud;
particularly with The Mountain Goats playing in the background.
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2011
Thanks...:nod:
Still waiting on the collaboration...:)
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2012   Writer
if you have any sort of idea
where you'd like to go with a collab,
note me.
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HugQueen Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2011   Writer
:heart:! Belated congratulations!

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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2011
:heart: :heart: :heart:
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:iconliliwrites:
LiliWrites Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Very peaceful. Congrats on your DD. :)
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2011
Thanks
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:iconpiscesandthediamonds:
Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
god, this is so magical :heart: totally deserved that DD. :heart: there is so much volume against the vividness...amazing.
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2011
Thanks Champ.
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:iconarichy:
Arichy Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Hello! We're waiting your work here :icondd-catalogue:

Thank you :heart:
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:icon520romeo:
520romeo Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
rain can be such an overused subject but you've taken a complete new twist on it.
the narration is wonderful, and the images are so beautiful.
i love the last line.

reminds me of the good earth haha.
good job. :heart:
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011
Featured: [link]
:heart::heart::heart:
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011
Thankyou.
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011
It is what it is. Be happy that is enough.
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Lecura Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2011
This is such beautiful poetry. I especially loved the line,
and I believed there were stars beyond the sight of man on any grey day.
It's great. :)
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morning-tonight Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011
The love for rain in a different perspective...it's very well written. The flow and cadence is smooth with pauses and yields in the just the right places. After a favourite, I'll have to check the rest of your gallery. Thank you!
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Axe-Cell Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautifully well put, reciting it really brings out the images that somehow clears my mind. I don't know why, but I love rain. ^^

Congratulations on the DD!! :clap:
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011
Thanks!! Yes, so do I.
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011   Writer
beautiful rendition of the orchestra of nature. very well done and very deserving of the DD. :clap:
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011
Cheers pal.
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:iconfruitbatslyra:
fruitbatslyra Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is beautifully written, I loved every word. :clap:
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011
I am glad you enjoyed it thank you for commenting.
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:iconfruitbatslyra:
fruitbatslyra Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You are very welcome. :aww:
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RequiemsandReveries Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011
SUPER congrats on the DD and this poem is fab, as I'm sure you already know. Love love
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011
Thankya :heart:
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:iconperither:
Perither Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
so freekin good, i was about to quote a line that i liked but i would just end up quoting the whole piece. (: bravo
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011
Why thank you for such a great comment... I am glad you enjoyed it.
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lunapietra Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011
Good poetry is always so refreshing:) Loved it.
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011
Thank you. I appreciate that.
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sumarlegur Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
lovely work.
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011
Thanks!
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LorenaBurdon Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011
ah~ its amazing, i loved it!
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011
I am glad you enjoyed, thanks!
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jswebb Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011   Writer
This is incredibly evocative; sonics really provide a quiet, ambient atmosphere. I can almost hear a susurrus as I read this out loud.

I run a blog called the deviantArt orations, or dAo, where I upload audio of my reciting poems found here on dA. I'd love to recite this and put it up there (citing you and your main page here). If you'd rather I didn't, that's fine, but I think this piece would be a wonderful addition.

You can check out the tumblr account if you'd like: [link]

Thank you for sharing this lovely work. :)
-J
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