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The dark skies' autumn stars
rain a storm of living sparks,
of curling weighted,
orange carbons,
upon this fractured moment,

upon this stifled earth.

Out on the crackling hearth,
the dancing heat,
a cadent beacon,
lights your amber suit,
imbues your wintered skin.

Far beyond your kin,
long past the
unheard prayers that sit
on vast, crackling voids,
far beyond
the transit of the flickering Venus,

there is the living spirit
sitting still and true,
in rock, and wood,
and wind and gods eyes
are glowing, breathing coals,
looking up
on a charcoal
of too soon dreamed eternities.

So now we remember new colours,
we recall lighter lights,
softer modes of living,
more fluid states of being.


The ghostly clouds
of ashen thought,
that die with the fire, that die with the dawn,
that leave the moment so desolate
so dire and so awake,

are condemned now,
to a single simple motion,
a flicker
of burning memory.
©2009-2010 *brassteeth
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:iconnecrofeelyouryack:
I think this is cool, although not my favorite of your pieces. It's like I can see the stanzas and their various images as parts of a whole, but I can't put them together and figure out your meaning. I'm catching a hint of philosophical and religious themes; the Pheonix typically suggests the life cycle, rebirth, etc. Beyond that it's all a little hazy to me.

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"If you bring forth what is within you, what you bring forth will save you. If you do not bring forth what is within you, what you do not bring forth will destroy you."
:iconiampoetry:
Is it just me or is there too many commas in the first stanza? It made me stumble.

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Poetry is truly boundless. It is my passion, I am the canvas.
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my poetry, lemon
both bitter and tart
you decide the taste of my art

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:iconbrassteeth:
will have a look....

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BT.

"The truth knocks on the door and you say, "Go away, I'm looking for the truth," and so it goes away."
— Robert M. Pirsig
Zen and the Art of Motorcycle maintanance
:iconbrassteeth:
Hey, Thanks for the feedback, maybe its all a little hazy to me as well...

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BT.

"The truth knocks on the door and you say, "Go away, I'm looking for the truth," and so it goes away."
— Robert M. Pirsig
Zen and the Art of Motorcycle maintanance
:iconyouinventedme:
The dark skies' autumn stars
rain a storm of living sparks,
of curling, weighted,
orange carbons,
upon this fractured moment,

upon this stifled earth.

terrific

there is some great imagery
throughout the poem
and I like the rhyme scheme
you used for the first half

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one half of *ZombiesAteUs
:iconbrassteeth:
Thanks. Always great to get your feedback. I decided to stop making sense for 5 minutes.

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BT.

"The truth knocks on the door and you say, "Go away, I'm looking for the truth," and so it goes away."
— Robert M. Pirsig
Zen and the Art of Motorcycle maintanance
:icontingtingwindchimes09:
wow so many good verbs here. love this! i'm gonna be a picky dork here, but phoenix is spelled like dat.

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Big Bang is VIP! <3

love you BB [link]

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:iconass-soul:
I dig.

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MYSTIC SPIRAL CONSUMES MY ASS IN A CLOUD OF LEAVES FALLING FROM THE MOONS GRACE... do i fit in here yet? Didn't think so... Olive Juice Too!

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