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Dear Emma,

The truth is I'm not a painter.

The truth is I followed you here from that flower shop on Whitmore Street, two and a half months ago. Please, keep reading.

You actually took my breath away when I glimpsed you holding a bunch of lilies in your slender hands at the flower shop counter.  You stunned me. That's never happened to me before. I was watching you turning the bouquet left to right, you seemed in awe of the flowers' beauty.  Your eyes, your perfect smile, the way you held yourself. It was not a conscious decision to follow you here. I think I was in a trance. I know how it looks; I know it sounds like a movie.

When Miss Vale said it was only the beginning of the painting course, lesson two, I signed up, paid my money on the spot, just to follow you into the room.

Just to keep seeing you.  Just to be near you. I know it's crazy.

I stared at the back of your bobbed hair for that entire lesson. In my mind I was shouting for you to turn around and notice me. I didn't even paint the bowl of fruit Miss Vale asked us to paint. I told her I was getting the perspective right in my mind.

Remember the first conversation we had, the one about Monet, the water lilies? I made all that stuff up, just to sound like I knew something about famous painters. I really only knew that you loved lilies.

I arrived early the next week, just to get the easel next to yours, the old guy with the blue suede vest wasn't too happy. I get here early every week now; just to make sure he doesn't steal it back.

It's two months on and I really know you now. You're so easy to talk to, so warm and caring and kind. I love the way you grab my arm when you laugh at my jokes, or try and paint my cheek when I'm not ready to stop you. I write those little jokes throughout the week, just to tell them to you on painting nights.

Right now you're laughing at me, asking to look at what I'm painting. But I will keep this hidden until the end of the class when I'll probably just turn and run away. I'm sorry to tell you like this, a simple note written in grey pencil, on a big square of white canvas.

Tonight Miss Vale told us to paint something we loved.

But the truth is I'm not a painter.

Oliver
This is a young artists story, 16 and a half, going on smitten.

(and no it's not me for those who asked..I am much older and less honest..)
Only the names have been changed. To protect the teacher.

Edit: Thanks For the D.D.
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Painting Nights by brassteeth ( Suggested by SouthSydney and Featured by neurotype )
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I don't think I can tell you in words how much I love this. It's so honest and open, and the style is refreshingly different. I absolutely LOVE the idea of this being the letter he wrote on the canvas. The end hit me like... well, I don't know what, but I know a piece is good when it sends chills down my spine!

Regarding your questions: Oliver seems completely honest and desperately in love with Emma. It's that beautiful, pure love that everyone wants to see, and you hit the nail right on the head.

You also did an excellent job with painting a picture (no pun intended) with this piece. I could see them sitting together, her laughing, etc. I could see him following her and watching her look at the flowers.

A few grammatical/orthographic errors:
1. "in awe of the flowers beauty" --> flowers should be flowers', as it is a plural possessive.
2. "blue swede vest" --> I think you mean suede, right? Like the soft leather sort of material?

Overall, I just want to read this over and over and over again, because it is probably one of my favorite short stories now! xD
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WhiteOrchidRose Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Loved it super much
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2015
Thanks 
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
So happy to see this one get the DD. I had suggested it ages ago myself. :heart:
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014
Thanks!!
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nyqueent Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014
I don't usually comment but this...this was beautiful. "Please, keep reading." This line grabbed me and held on tight. I couldn't look away if I wanted to and I felt his desperation in those three words. I'm rooting for him.
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014
Thank you!
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mabecky12 Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
please help me I'm trying to post my little prolog and its being a female dog to me
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
I think there is a help desk for problems like that. Sorry cannot help.
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neurotype Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I love the contrast between the candor of the letter and then his actions.
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
Thanks. And thanks for your support.
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beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014   Writer
Your writing is consistently powerful and lovely. Congrats on the DD. :heart:
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
Thanks for your support. It is appreciated.
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
I’m very happy for you!!! :iconloveloveplz: :tighthug:
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
Thanks!
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconflyingheartsplz::iconsweethugplz::iconflyingheartsplz:
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NocturnalScribe Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
"a simple note written in grey pencil, on a big square of white canvas"

I don't know why, but I love this line C: 
Also, I love how you added the man with the blue suede vest, it made me smile to myself

Fabulous overall!
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
Thanks, great comments!
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:iconunspecifiedunknown:
UnspecifiedUnknown Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014   Writer
i do not understand how this became a daily deviation. 
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:iconc-a-harland:
C-A-Harland Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Student Writer
This is just gorgeous.
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
Thanks!!
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CaptainMcClellan Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
So begins the story of many a young artist. It'll be fun to watch her crush him into little pieces and have the pain, disillusionment, and obsession forge him into an excellent artist only for him to be too hopeless about the world to actually feel he has merit. Even when he gets to excellent levels, he won't be good enough. And it won't be for a few years that he gets over it. In his heart though, he'll know that a part of him will always wish it hadn't been so. A part of him will tell him the world is wrong and that he shouldn't have just let it go. But he'll suppress it and get on with his life like everyone else.
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
Hmmm......Thanks for the read..
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:iconcaptainmcclellan:
CaptainMcClellan Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
You're welcome. I'm really glad you wrote it. Sorry if my expression of appreciation seems to be a bit less than appreciation. I'm assuming that you're writing about a real person. If that's so, then try to help as much as it's within your power to do so. The cards are already stacked against him, so as a friend you should even the odds a little if you can.
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
All good. Thanks for that!
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:iconcaptainmcclellan:
CaptainMcClellan Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
You're welcome.
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:iconwaterygrave:
WateryGrave Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Student General Artist
I read it again. ; ~;
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
Thanks!
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Veggiepea29 Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Student General Artist
Oh  hey that`s my name xD

Lovely story :3
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
Thank you.
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:iconveggiepea29:
Veggiepea29 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Student General Artist
Welcome :3
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archangelmary Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
I can't even describe how beautiful this is...
I am an artist myself, but even if I wasn't, I know I would still be very touched by this.
Please, write more!
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
Thank you.
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CPT-CUPCAKE-art Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014   Traditional Artist
Beautiful <3
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
Thank you.
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TheDagmar Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This made my day :D Wonderful story, a fresh format, it's a lovely read and just made warmth wash over me because of how adorable it is. Llama Emoji-05 (Flower Sparkles) [V1]
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
Thank you kindly.
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014   Writer
Hey, Chris! Congrats on the feature. I've always liked this piece.
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
Thanks, yeh it's a nice little thing....
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TuesdayNightCompany Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
Love the closing line.
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
Thanks.
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StarlightComet Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I just. :heart::heart::heart::heart::heart:
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
Thanks!
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:iconpurplemochi7:
PurpleMochi7 Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw, sweet story; awesome work.
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
Thanks!
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:iconpurplemochi7:
PurpleMochi7 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!
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GuinevereToGwen Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Student Writer
Wonderful! Very heartwarming. :) I wonder what happens next, but I guess that's for the reader to decide. ;)
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
Thanks! Yep, sure is..
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:iconrainbowdaughter:
RainbowDaughter Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is beautiful!
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014
Thanks!
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:iconrainbowdaughter:
RainbowDaughter Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You are very welcome :)
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