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An incessant wind is blowing
the dying wheat
around my knees.
Fragile stalks
clutch at my faded denim
like lost and hungry children.
My mouth like this soil,
perpetually dry.

Out here,
the sun is so bright
it lights your sins,
here is no place to flee.
It has burnt me
into such a broken mirage,
I have become
unconvinced of myself.

I kneel on this
seared, sooty land,
like a lunatic, praying in
a patchwork perdition.
Dusty boots trod
this gaping earth,
crossing cracks wide enough
to swallow my faith.

These forgotten fields hold
patterns of loss so close,
like a child’s blanket.
If Hope is a rare shadow,
you’ll find neither here,
even our memories
have become distant memories.

The sky
has forgotten how to cry.
©2009-2010 *brassteeth
:iconbrassteeth:

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Sometimes it just doesn't rain.

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:iconrlkirkland:
Wow...:wow:
A lament of all who have put their faith in the earth to produce their livelyhood.
Well done. :star: :star: :star:

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People are Important - Goals much less
When we stop learning we have begun to die - Shamelessly Purloined
:iconpearlstorm:
The last line is beautiful. :clap:

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Be as a bird perched on a frail branch that she feels bending beneath her, still she sings away all the same, knowing she has wings. :earth:
:iconbrassteeth:
Thanks, I appreciate the positive feedback. Yes thats exactly what it is. Cheers.

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BT.

"The truth knocks on the door and you say, "Go away, I'm looking for the truth," and so it goes away."
— Robert M. Pirsig
Zen and the Art of Motorcycle maintanance
:iconbrassteeth:
Thanks!

Thats nice of you to say.

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BT.

"The truth knocks on the door and you say, "Go away, I'm looking for the truth," and so it goes away."
— Robert M. Pirsig
Zen and the Art of Motorcycle maintanance
:iconpearlstorm:
No problem! :)

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Be as a bird perched on a frail branch that she feels bending beneath her, still she sings away all the same, knowing she has wings. :earth:
:iconrlkirkland:
:thumbsup:

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People are Important - Goals much less
When we stop learning we have begun to die - Shamelessly Purloined
:iconnecrofeelyouryack:
I think the third stanza really shines above the rest. You hit the nail on the head with that one, as far as images and sound devices.

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"If you bring forth what is within you, what you bring forth will save you. If you do not bring forth what is within you, what you do not bring forth will destroy you."
:iconbrassteeth:
Thanks!

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BT.

"The truth knocks on the door and you say, "Go away, I'm looking for the truth," and so it goes away."
— Robert M. Pirsig
Zen and the Art of Motorcycle maintanance
:icondrop-asd:
Gorgeous work! :heart:

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Una canzone può anche non parlar d'amore...

"A song can also not talk about love..."

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